Some Lyrics, Thoughts

Some lyrics which I have written over the past couple of months for my band (Penguin Park). These  lyrics are for our second song that we are working on (Working title Poptarts aka Song 2). 

I took the inspiration of writing these vocals from the point of view of Genocide and basic suffering any man can face in his lifetime. It starts of with him explaining his situation, trying to fight while constantly being suppressed by the ones who inflict pain upon him. He prays for god to take away all his pain and misery because he has already lost a lot and wants to be free and live a new life. After a ruthless struggle, he loses his patience and in the end resorts to his faith and says that there is nothing he can do to defeat fate, but he is in content that he tried his level best to survive and fight back. 

Verse 1 :- 

(War) Take me to die in this war of hate 

(Fate) Deliver unto my sins 

Forget the past, you may just not last 

(Forced) I am forced to kill the very thing I love 

(Lust) Fall to the hands of this sacrifice 

Lose it all

Chorus :- 

Take away, this misery

What Ive lost cannot be found

We disciples will slowly fall

From the skies where we once belonged

OR (last 2 lines)

Resurrected, your god is safe

But you're the one who has to fall

Verse 2 :- 

Face the pain, cross the bridge of light 

Fall face first, die of your thirst

Forgive your old sins, crawl to reimburse 

For life and embrace 

The greatest battle of this age

Dark and Grey, the mask hides your face

Fall to the grace, of the fallen slaves   

Ghosts of this land, take over your head

Crush you within, you crumble - YOU'RE DEAD

Chorus 2 :-

Take from me, these memories

Now I now where I went wrong

Its time to rise, in mutiny

Against the darkness of our fate

Ending Vocals :- 

Follow the path, Of Destruction

Silence beckons, feel your infections 

You torture my soul, You destroy my race

You kill the very sense of pain

Please comment and tell me how you feel about them.